thedarkhorseMentor Posted: July 13, 20192019-07-13T00:23:56+10:00 2019-07-13T00:23:56+10:00In: RomanceWhen he learns the one that got away is getting married, a man sets about winning her back, with the help of the fianc??s ex, only to fall for her as well.– ShareFacebook6 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentdpg 105 Loglines 5,523 Reviews 556 Best Reviews 111,842 Points View Profile dpg Singularity 2019-07-13T07:15:00+10:00Added an answer on July 13, 2019 at 7:15 am At 32 words the logline has the basic elements:An inciting incident: “When he learns the one that got away is getting married,…”A protagonist with an objective goal:”…a man sets about winning her back…”A strategy for achieving his objective goal: “…with the help of the fianc??s ex,…”And a midpoint plot twist:”…only to fall for her as well.”The midpoint plot twist is an element that distinguishes the project from “My Best Friend’s Wedding” (1997) with which it will inevitably be compared. It also sets up an interesting dilemma for the protagonist and hints at his character flaw. Maybe his pursuit of the one who got away is a vanity project. Or maybe, like Shakespeare’s Romeo, he’s in love with being in love. Is either woman really the right one for him?This is a movie I would like to see to find out the answers. Best wishes with your writing!0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 61 Loglines 3,389 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,369 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2019-07-13T09:21:30+10:00Added an answer on July 13, 2019 at 9:21 am I think the twist that separates this from, “my best friends wedding” is that it is two exes who try to break up the wedding only to fall in love with each other. Not a bad twist.Possible Title: Rose Colored Exes0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppyqwertz 2 Loglines 108 Reviews 31 Best Reviews 5,069 Points View Profile yqwertz Mentor 2019-07-14T17:27:09+10:00Added an answer on July 14, 2019 at 5:27 pm As a comedy, the story might work. In a romance audiences expect HEA (Happily Ever After) endings. However, the man’s main character flaw, at least the one visible in the logline, is fickleness.? So, even if the man and the fiance’s ex (who has the same character flaw) are together at the end, why should the audience believe it is HEA? Comedies (including romantic comedies) can work without a believable HEA ending.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppMike Pedley United Kingdom (UK) 66 Loglines 616 Reviews 99 Best Reviews 50,948 Points View Profile Mike Pedley Singularity 2019-07-16T17:43:49+10:00Added an answer on July 16, 2019 at 5:43 pm I think yqwertz has a point in that if the mc’s character flaw is fickleness, this isn’t necessarily resolved at the end. However, I think that it could be easy enough to rectify that by suggesting that his character flaw is that he’s stuck in the past or idealistic. It would have to be carefully written to ensure that at no point did he seem fickle though.I don’t think a romance film has to have a happy ending – even if I agree in part that the audience might expect it. Titanic, Shakespeare in Love, Atonement, Never Let Me Go, Blue Valentine, Romeo + Juliet – all films that could fall into the “romance” category and all end tragically. Love is complicated and it doesn’t always end well – I don’t think anyone would dispute that – so while an audience might want it, if you’re making a film that truly reflects the nature of love then an audience shouldn’t be surprised if it ends unhappily ever after.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppdpg 105 Loglines 5,523 Reviews 556 Best Reviews 111,842 Points View Profile dpg Singularity 2019-07-16T22:11:40+10:00Added an answer on July 16, 2019 at 10:11 pm I don’t see why fickleness can’t work as a character flaw. Although I’m not sure that is his subjective personal problem issue in this story.? And isn’t it possible that the protagonist and the fianc??s ex have the same subjective issue to deal with?? After all, the groom-to-be is the one who got away from her.? If she didn’t have some emotional investment in her ex, why would she cooperate?Whatever, the focus of? a logline is on the? objective goal the character wants to achieve, not the subjective problem he needs to resolve.I agree with yqwertz that modern audiences have come to expect a Happy Ever After ending for romances. But I also agree with mikepedley85 that there can be exceptions.? And I would add to his list “The Fault in Our Stars”.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppthedarkhorse 99 Loglines 252 Reviews 14 Best Reviews 6,219 Points View Profile thedarkhorse Mentor 2019-07-18T17:52:10+10:00Added an answer on July 18, 2019 at 5:52 pm Thanks for the feedback everyone. I’ve since tweaked this idea and will post again with a new logline.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?