When stuck in a Groundhog Day 7-day cycle after an explosion on the ISS, a career-obsessed astronaut must figure out the cause of the blast and why he keeps coming back.

    Summitry Posted on October 16, 2019 in Drama.

    Version 1 // When he wakes up on Earth one week before an explosion blew him into space during a routine spacewalk, a career-driven astronaut and father-man must figure out what went wrong and how he came back.

    on October 21, 2019.
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      If I understand correctly, the astronaut was blown out into space, fell through some kind of wormhole and came back to Earth a week before he left. Is this a closed time-like loop in which the events will be infinitely repeated until the astronaut can break out of the loop? If that is the case, then the astronaut’s goal is to break out of the loop. (If he is a family man, then his motivation to break out of the loop is his desire to watch his children grow up.)

      If the astronaut is not caught in a loop and this is a one off event, then how does he distinguish what happened from a bad dream?

      Mentor Answered on October 17, 2019.

      You’re right, the astronaut is caught in a loop and that the only way to break the loop is to stay with his family but I wanted to add an additional dilemma. He knows someone else will die if he doesn’t go on the mission. Not sure how this will work yet.

      I’m thinking the inciting incident potentially needs updating to be the second or even third time he wakes up back on Earth. It’s when he realises he’s in a loop.

      on October 17, 2019.

      Oh, so it’s “Groundhog Day” in outer space. Kudos to yqwertz for divining that, but I suggest it’s better to assume that most logline readers are more like me, who see no more or less than what words literally say (or in this case don’t).

      on October 17, 2019.
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        I really really like this! Please write it!

        Wish I could say I got the Groundhog Day angle from the logline – well done yqwertz.

        As DPG often says, lead with your sizzle – Groundhog Day meets Gravity, or Groundhog Day in outer space…

        As the trope is so well known by now, you can leverage Harold Ramis’ legacy in your logline. Also, the specifics of how and where he wakes up are less relevant in the logline.

        My try:
        When stuck in a Groundhog Day cycle after an explosion on the ISS, a career obsessed astronaut must choose between his family and his job to break the loop.

        Singularity Answered on October 20, 2019.

        Thanks for the comments, Nir. Greatly appreciated.

        Yeah, I definitely struggled to condense the inciting incident and I obviously trimmed too much haha.

        I love your idea of using Groundhog Day in space in the logline. As a hook, that’s it in a nutshell.

        on October 21, 2019.
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          I do like it… as in… what the hell happened?  Who reset reality?  It’s a good setup.  With groundhog day, there’s some hand-wavy magic that makes the character “figure out” how to stop the loop.  And I see you confirmed that it IS a loop.  That “Happy Death Day” movie is also like this.    Also, this book I read recently, Multitude (by Dean Cole), which actually had some crazy physics-based explanation to explain the loop.  But personally, I’d find it refreshing and interesting if it wasn’t “some magical loop”, and there’s a story behind why he got “saved” and why.  Maybe that opens up a plotline rather than the loop being the entire plot.  Just a thought.  Still, there’s no clear goal, just the mystery… if it is a loop, you can say:

          After repeatedly dying  on the same spacewalk and each time ending up safe back on earth one week earlier, an astronaut must figure out what is causing the phenomenon and how to break free of it.

          Samurai Answered on October 18, 2019.
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            I am having a hard time imagining what is going on, what the plot is, what the stakes are:  he survived — what is there for him (and the audience) to worry about?

            So when he wakes up, there is no one around, no support team, no medics to explain to him what happened?  Where is he?  In a hospital or…?

            And I don’t see how his being career driven or a family man is germane to his dramatic predicament (whatever that predicament is).

            Singularity Answered on October 17, 2019.

            He drifted off into space after the explosion then time travelled back to one week before the accident. I played around with ways to say this and I’m guessing it’s not clear haha.

            on October 17, 2019.

            I’m having the same problem with my logline, but the reviews are really helping me. I’m up to Revision #7 and  I’m still trying to be concise (haven’t succeeded yet) and feel I’m learning a lot being a part of Logline It.

            on October 18, 2019.
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              Does the premise of the story lie more in science or  more in fantasy?  IOW: like the astronaut in  “The Martian”, is he trapped in an astrophysical predicament and he must “science the shit out of it” to escape the  infinite loop (science).  Or like the weatherman in “Groundhog Day”, does he become inexplicably trapped in the infinite loop because of a character flaw and there’s no way out until he unintentionally stumbles upon the “lesson learned” (fantasy)?

              Singularity Answered on October 21, 2019.

              At the moment, he tries to science the shit out of it but eventually realises that it’s a “lesson learned” scenario. I would quite like it to be similar to Interstellar in some respects but on a much smaller scale. He comes to the realisation that love and faith have their own place within science but it’s a personal journey – not about humanity as a whole. I hope that sort of answers your question haha.

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                Mikepedley85:

                Okay.  However, there are clear stakes — global stakes — from the git-go in  “Interstellar”: the survival of humanity.  What are the stakes, personal and global, in this scenario?  What does he stand to suffer, to lose if he can’t break out of the infinite loop? (I mean, it occurs to me that one option is that he could be having an anti-Groundhog Day experience in that the week he keeps looping through is the best week of his life.)

                Singularity Answered on October 21, 2019.
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