When her orbital city of New Delhi is destroyed, a spirited Indian girl escapes to Freedom city determined to join the space force and take down the evil prophet of New Babylon, who’s responsible for the loss of everyone she loved.”
>>>With giant orbital space cities
Seems to be the story hook. More to the point: what is the story hook for you? What draws you into this story?
And what’s the backstory on the orbiting space cities? Do they exist because of necessity or opportunity? That is, do they exist because humans had to flee the earth because it became inhabitable? Or do they exist because humans just can?
Some stories are all plot, Misery for example. The characters don’t change and they have only physical and immediate needs. The logline you have tells me that’s this movie, which is great.
But if it is more about character then
A girl seeking revenge for the destruction of her planet …..
This is an idea I have been toying with. Seeing if it has legs.
Sorry it’s so long, but it is impossible to explain a future where there is a return to the city-state. With giant orbital space cities (orbiting the Sun, not the Earth) and the massive war that will ensue, in just a few words.
Hopefully, some of the bright people here can see the unnecessary words so I can cut this down by about ten words.
Possible title: Star Epic