When her orbital city of New Delhi is destroyed, a spirited Indian girl escapes to Freedom city determined to join the space force and take down the evil prophet of New Babylon, who’s responsible for the loss of everyone she loved.”

    Singularity Posted on October 24, 2018 in SciFi.
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      >>>With giant orbital space cities

      Seems to be the story hook. More to the point:  what is the story hook for you?  What draws you into this story?

      And what’s the backstory on the orbiting space cities?  Do they exist because of necessity or opportunity?  That is, do they exist because humans had to flee the earth because it became inhabitable?  Or do they exist because  humans just can?

      Singularity Answered on October 25, 2018.

      In the future, Humans sort of get their act together.

      Because of advances in technology,  Humans live in giant domed orbiting cities. (There are actually many orbiting domes. One would be for farming, one would be for industry… and so on) and Earth is now a preserve. (Some farming is allowed, also indigenous peoples are allowed to stay)

      Each city is its own state.

      There have been wars before between city-states, But usually, if one city gets the upper hand, the other city will pay what’s called the Danegeld. (Pay them off so they will go away)

      However, a new power has arisen. The Prophet of New Babylon, He claims to have received the word of God directly from God himself. New Babylon isn’t interested in the Danegeld. It’s either, die, convert or be forced into slavery.

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        Some stories are all plot, Misery for example. The characters don’t change and they have only physical and immediate needs. The logline you have tells me that’s this movie, which is great.

        But if it is more about character then

        A girl seeking revenge for the destruction of her planet …..

        Summitry Answered on October 25, 2018.

        You make a very good point. Since I am still fiddling around with this idea, I have to admit I haven’t given the lead character a flaw. Something she must overcome internally as the story progresses… Maybe she needs a mentor, an Obi-Wan (So to speak)

        on October 25, 2018.
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          This is an idea I have been toying with. Seeing if it has legs.
          Sorry it’s so long, but it is impossible to explain a future where there is a return to the city-state.  With giant orbital space cities (orbiting the Sun, not the Earth) and the massive war that will ensue, in just a few words.

          Hopefully, some of the bright people here can see the unnecessary words so I can cut this down by about ten words.

          Possible title: Star Epic

          Singularity Answered on October 24, 2018.
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