When her plants succumb to a disease, a mute girl, haunted by visions, must find resistant seeds in a violent post-apocalyptic world.
“When her plants succumb to a disease, a mute girl, haunted by visions, must find resistant seeds in a violent post-apocalyptic world.”
I think this concept has potential, even though it is similar to other post-apocalyptic stories. My recommendation is to give the protagonist a grander motivation. Are the plants a food source? Does she have some kind of personal connection to them? Is there something special?
What is the antagonistic force? I can guess, but that’s an important part that should be included in the logline. Are there some sort of mutated animals, or other sci-fi element, or just the usual (pretty cliche at this point) group of apathetic survivors who are either a) rapists b) cannibals or c) just violent people, or otherwise some sort of combination.
Here’s an example I’m making up: After her crops die from disease, a mute girl must search for resistant seeds in a world decimated by nuclear war. (21)
I hope this helps.
Agreed with the above – it’s very hard to see the forest for the trees (pardon the pun…)
What is the crux of the story?
Her fighting and defeating the ‘evil corporation’/high tech people?
Or her raising a successful crop?
Or her learning to communicate and finding a family or group of friends?
In a world dying of famine because of genetic engineering run amuck — that seems to be the set up, the initial dramatic problem. (12 words)
>>>They are basing their future society on GMO everything, and unleashed the crop destroying disease themselves.
Unintentionally or intentionally?
If it’s “GMO everything” that includes the human genome, right? And if so, then isn’t there a bigger issue at stake here: eugenics, genetically engineering “better” humans?
What is the story really about? (The decline of genetic diversity in crops predates GMO by decades. GMO is a complication of the problem — not the cause.)