I think the logline needs to be clearer and more specific on some elements."Basketball championship" and"Young man": Is he a...
“When Mrs. Claus runs off with the Easter Bunny, a workaholic elf has four weeks to help Santa snap out of his funk or deliver the children’s presents without him.”
So… if the elf delivers the goods or gets Mr. C to — but Mr and Mrs remain estranged — it’s a happy ending? What is the real dramatic problem that must be solved here?
There is definitely a disconnect between the inciting incident and the goal, for the reason you give and because Mrs. Claus leaving doesn’t actually prevent Santa from doing his job.
Yep, you’re right There is a disconnect. Dramatic problem is the delivery of Christmas, the head elf is the protagonist so I need to adjust the inciting incident to be seen from his perspective – as per Richiev’s.
Maybe this is more in the right direction
“When a depressed Santa refuses to get out of bed after Mrs. Claus leaves him, it’s up to a Christmaholic elf to make sure Christmas doesn’t fail.”