When opinionated teenager, Mary Wollstonecraft sees her mother suffer in an abusive marriage, Mary decides to create a different pathway for women through education. Set against Georgian England, she struggles against her family, the church and the law in a desperate bid for acceptance before she is shunned by society.
This is too long and lacks a clear plot.
Check out the ‘Formula’ tab for a few basic guidelines.
To get you started, no need for names (unless it’s a character from pre existing IP), instead, best to describe the character by her identifying characteristic and ideally flaw. Secondly, you need to describe specifically what it is she wants and how she will go about getting it.
For example: what would signify, beyond a doubt, that she has created a different pathway? This would be the protagonist’s goal.
How, specifically, would she go about achieving this? “…struggles against…” is to broad and lacks detail to describe a course of action.
Biodramas are an exception to the rule that a logline should not include proper names. And in this case, the actual historical character is the story hook. So I think using her name in the logline is warranted.
But, yes, please check out the guidelines under “Formula”. The film and the logline need to be molded within the framework of the conventional requirement of a plot; that is, a character who must overcome a obstacles and/or defeat an antagonist to achieve a specific objective goal.
In Wollstonecraft’s case, I suggest framing the logline in terms of a character who was a proto-feminist, radically ahead of her time in both her lifestyle and her ideas about the role of women in society. Which, of course, she was. I suggest framing the plot (and logline) around her struggle to earn recognition and make a living as an author — an outrageous career choice for women in those days. (In that context, struggling to get a good education is a means to the general objective of liberating herself from the social and economic constraints of her era — and paving the way for other women to do the same by her example and writings.)
The true story of the struggle of the pioneering feminist, Mary Wollstonecraft, to liberate herself from every social convention of 18th century England and become a writer.
(I suggest that the italiziced words are key concepts to incorporate into the logline to make her story appealing to and relevant to modern movie makers and viewers.)
Most men haven’t heard of Ms. Wollstonecraft. But in the film business there are plenty of women writers, directors and producers who have. Who look to her as a model and inspiration for their own struggle to break through the glass ceiling of show business, to overcome the conventions and biases that continue to oppress them. That is the market to target for the logline and the script.
Best wishes with your writing. She’s a character worth dramatizing; she has a story that needs to be told.