When people die when they touch the doctor he must defeat death, who chose him as his successor, to return to normality.
First of all, the logline is confusing to me. I’m not sure what the story is about.
Second, premises for stories in the fantasy genre, in particular, require a suspension of disbelief. The premise for this story asks me to suspend disbelief, don’t question, just accept the notion that the grim reaper passes the scythe to someone else. And a doctor, no less.
I, for one, am unable to do so. I want to know why grim reaper must choose another successor. And I want to know why of all the billions of people he could have chosen, does he choose that particular doctor.
In drama, the protagonist getting chosen is never coincidental. On a subjective level, in terms of the protagonist’s character arc it can’t be a purely random, capricious act. It must expose a character flaw that must be overcome to achieve his objective goal. Being chosen not only incites a quest for an objective goal, it also incites a character arc, a struggle to overcome a flaw, a weakness, a vulnerability.
What is the doctor’s character flaw that must be overcome if he is to throw off the curse of his new “calling”?
Is he (the doctor) like a something to resemble ‘philosopher’s stone’? You could’ve included the harm turning someone to gold does, doesn’t it mean anyhow they’re gonna die? Being invisible isn’t as much the same as being a piece of an object – Gold sounds furious, or may be the person is, who turned into a gold object – or else, doesn’t death happen anyhow? – isn’t it normal to die, anyhow people die, and magic like that of philosopher’s stone and that old story I know – of Midas – does your story resemble the story of Midas – if I were writing one such story based on the logline, I’d include these two as one person – Midas and ‘Philosopher’s Stone’.
Or else, try thinking the ‘other possibility’. Of what I said earlier here. If people die by touch of the doctor, if I were him I’d search for this – where does the power come from? And seeing that he’s genuinely a doctor who’d want to save lives instead of killing – it’s pointless to think otherwise, or else, think of the first possibility. Reasons – why’d he kill, or not kill, when someone is given powers, there comes either responsibility with it, or it goes unnoticed, anyhow, people die. Gold sounds to be more attractive, than a dead body.
Just a couple of suggestions I gave here – if I were writing a story with this logline.