When a prospective client invites himself to the first summer party at the law firm executive’s house, the executive must make sure the client is satisfied so he is won over while also dealing with new crises that arise in his home life.


    Penpusher Posted on September 9, 2019 in Drama.
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      It is a bit long. You can tighten it up by being more concrete on the goal and obstacles. (A collision between family and professional life always occurs at company parties, so this bit does not add much to the logline.)

      Don’t know if this fits your story, but something like this might:

      An executive hoping for a promotion organizes a company party, but when an eccentric client shows up, [something happens] and the executive must [do something] to save the party and his career.

      Mentor Answered on September 9, 2019.

      Thank you. How is it purely as an idea for a short film? Does it seem interesting?

      on September 10, 2019.

      Definitely. Reminds me a bit of “The Party” with Peter Sellers.

      on September 11, 2019.
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        Good rough draft rewrite by yqwertz.  There has to be something obvious at stake for the main character.

        Singularity Answered on September 10, 2019.
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