When the NFL players go on strike, a former collegiate star quarterback and a group of misfits athletes get a second chance to live out their professional football dreams.
Love this film! I would maybe change the goal to be more related to the aim of winning 3 of 4 games to get into the playoffs. In my mind it’s the more tangible goal as each of their individual professional dreams are slightly different and harder for a reader to visualise. I think the description “misfit athletes” is perfect but I’d maybe say “quarterback must lead a team of misfit athletes” – I think it solidifies his protagonist status a little. Possibly even describe him as “failed” – hint at the internal struggle and makes it easier to see where his own arc is going perhaps?
Just want to watch the film again now!
I haven’t seen the film. (Because I not a fan of American football. There I said it.) However, evaluating it as if it were a logline for a spec script, I think that Richiev’s 1st version is good enough.
In movies with aspirational themes, the protagonist is always struggling for nothing less than his biggest dream. In this case, it’s to play pro football with a shot at the Super Bowl, right? Getting to the playoffs is a step along the way, not the final destination. It seems to me that getting a chance to live out his biggest dream is good enough to convey what the movie is about, where the action is going to go.