When the NFL players go on strike, a former collegiate star quarterback and a group of misfits athletes get a second chance to live out their professional football dreams.

Richiev Singularity Asked on November 26, 2018 in Examples.
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Love this film! I would maybe change the goal to be more related to the aim of winning 3 of 4 games to get into the playoffs. In my mind it’s the more tangible goal as each of their individual professional dreams are slightly different and harder for a reader to visualise. I think the description “misfit athletes” is perfect but I’d maybe say “quarterback must lead a team of misfit athletes” – I think it solidifies his protagonist status a little. Possibly even describe him as “failed” – hint at the internal struggle and makes it easier to see where his own arc is going perhaps?

Just want to watch the film again now!

mikepedley85 Mentor Reviewed on November 26, 2018.

This is definitely one of my favorite sports, feel-good movies.
And good logline critique.

“When the NFL players go on strike, a former collegiate star quarterback, who washed out due to injury, has one last chance at his pro-football dream, if he can guide a team of misfit replacement athletes to the playoffs.”
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“When the NFL players go on strike, a former collegiate star quarterback has one last chance at his pro-football dream, if he can guide a team of misfit replacement athletes to the playoffs.”

on November 27, 2018.
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I  haven’t seen the film.  (Because I not a fan of American football.  There I said it.)  However, evaluating it as if it were a logline for a spec script, I think that Richiev’s 1st version is good enough.

In movies with aspirational themes, the protagonist is always struggling for nothing less than his biggest dream.  In this case, it’s to play pro football with a shot at the Super Bowl, right?  Getting to the playoffs is a step along the way, not the final destination.  It seems to me that getting a chance to live out his biggest dream is good enough to convey what the movie is about, where the action is going to go.

fwiw

dpg Singularity Reviewed on November 27, 2018.

As replacement players, they’re only going to be playing the final 4 matches of the season BUT if they win 3 of the 4 the team will go into the playoffs and nobody believes that this would ever happen with replacement players. So in this story the dream is, as simply replacement players for four matches, to win 3 games against the odds. That’s why I feel like it’s important to get this across in the logline as that plays heavily into the story. After the first game, in Richiev’s original logline, all the players have lived out this dream as they are officially “pro-footballers” but by giving them a goal that is further than just playing – it’s actually winning – I feel it gives the reader more clue as to where the story goes and what type of movie it’ll be – the classic feel-good underdog movie! Getting to the playoffs is the final destination for them.

Living in the UK, we don’t really get too much American Football over here (although it is getting more popular) and I’m not a big fan of the sport but I highly recommend this film regardless. It’s such an endlessly quotable, feel-good sports movie that I encourage everyone to watch. You’ll never hear the song “I will survive” the same way again!

on November 27, 2018.

Thanks for the clarification.   No doubt the emotional appeal lies in that it is an underdog story. I’ve added it to my  viewing list.

on November 27, 2018.
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Richiev Singularity Reviewed on November 26, 2018.
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