When their father dies, Jackie goes home to clean out the house and her basement dwelling, incel brother.

    Penpusher Posted on February 15, 2019 in Genres.
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      What is the main conflict of the story?
      What is standing in the way of the lead character?

      Singularity Answered on February 15, 2019.
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        You have done what i call a “shopping list”.  You have told us an event(s) and not the story.

        what is learnt?
        what is hard?
        what is the conflicts (internal. External)?

        here is one:

        Cleaning her dad’s house after his death a woman learns….. so she…. but…..stops her, forcing her to….. to achieve outcome.

        Summitry Answered on February 16, 2019.
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          I agree with the above reviewers, and it isn’t clear why and if she is cleaning her brother.

          Penpusher Answered on February 16, 2019.
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            Agreed with all the above comments.

            Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar – a logline needs to describe a goal.
            What is it your character must achieve?

            Singularity Answered on February 17, 2019.
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