When their father dies, Jackie goes home to clean out the house and her basement dwelling, incel brother.
What is the main conflict of the story?
What is standing in the way of the lead character?
You have done what i call a “shopping list”. You have told us an event(s) and not the story.
what is learnt?
what is hard?
what is the conflicts (internal. External)?
here is one:
Cleaning her dad’s house after his death a woman learns….. so she…. but…..stops her, forcing her to….. to achieve outcome.
I agree with the above reviewers, and it isn’t clear why and if she is cleaning her brother.
Agreed with all the above comments.
Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar – a logline needs to describe a goal.
What is it your character must achieve?