RE: To save her job, a downsized pharmaceutical statistician with Asperger’s uses all her wiles on a dangerous mission to expose ED drug counterfeiters.Singularity Posted on December 2, 2018 in Adventure.
Again, why would a CIA agent get involved? It’s a health problem, not a national security problem. The problem is outside his jurisdiction, beyond the scope of his job purview.
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RE: An exiled warden falls in love with a runaway 157 year old woman. When she is recaptured, he must save her and his daughter from the City he was banished from.Singularity Posted on December 2, 2018 in Noir.
How is it that a 157 year old woman is vigorous enough to escape from anywhere?
The logline is categorized as “Noir” but it seems more in the realm of the Fantastical or SciFi.
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RE: A Secret Service agent kills the President to save the Presidency. 20 years later, he must help save his estranged daughter, the newest President, when she is taken hostage.Singularity Posted on December 1, 2018 in Thriller.
Improbabilities aside, my primary concern is that the logline presents two plots of co-equal dramatic import: 1] The assassination of one President; 2] The rescue of another President. So what kind of project is this logline pitching? A mini-series? Because it seems to me it would be quite difficult cramming both plot lines within one feature film.
Not to mention that doing so would violate standard plotting convention going back to Aristotle’s Poetics, that a plot should have unity of action, one organizing principle, one dramatic spine (action, motive, objective goal) on which all the other elements hang. What is the organizing principle, the dramatic spine that unites both the assassination and the rescue? What is this story really about?
Also, the audience needs a justification for the assassination. What was the protagonist’s motive ? To rescue the country from a corrupt President? If so, the logline needs to indicate this.
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RE: Eric Grid lost his parents at a young age, and grew to despise his father for being poor and letting his mother die. after exiting the foster care system, he decides to become rich in the fastest way he thinks possible, by becoming a professional poker player in Vega City. However as he climbs the latter in the leagues, he discover the world of Black Games, where everyone uses magic to succeed to the top. Realizing this he finds himself a master to teach him the basics of magic in order to defend himself. The tournament however gets interrupted by a robbery commited by a group of adept magicians. After the whole fiasco, he returns to his hometown Neon City. Where he meets an old friend of his father who revealed his father was a magician who helped him to solve crimes performed with magic, and his death was a byproduct of getting into a dangerous case. This is how he became Magic Detective Ace.Singularity Posted on December 1, 2018 in Crime.
This is a synopsis not a logline. Suggest you review the guidelines for composing and industry standard logline under “Our Formula” at the top of the web page.
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