RE: Jesus Christ returns to earth, and while living under an alias, he decides to fight back against an unjust society.Penpusher Posted on March 15, 2019 in SciFi.
The greatest story of all. . . Christ’s return. . . not sure you are going for an irreverent, comedic take, or a quasi-biblical story that would draw (some) evangelicals. . . I like to get some idea of the film’s tone when I read a longline. Thanks for posting!
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RE: After an OCD-afflicted introvert finally gets a chance at true love with an inspiring woman who sees past her condition, jealousy over a casual friendship forces her to face the latent insecurities that threaten her chances.Penpusher Posted on March 13, 2019 in Drama.
Perhaps re-writing, being more specific about “gets and chance” and “latent insecurities,” would better convey your story. As it stands, I sort of want to see the film.
I know that you are exploring OCD and relationships, but wondering if you leave it up to the film to show your audience how this person struggles. So maybe experiment with writing a logline without even mentioning OCD.
The story idea actually does sound intriguing, especially is your not dealing with the subject matter in a (overly) comedic way.
Best wishes for success!
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