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Who is the antagonist and what is his motive?
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Who is the protagonist? If not the girl you must decide who it will be.
The information is all there but the order in which you present your logline could be better. Start with the prophetic pregnancy (inciting incident) and go to the outcome of it and the conflict stuff. By the way, who are these supernatural factions?- 141 views
- 4 reviews
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He wakes up out of his coffin, or he wakes up and gets out?
How does he end up leading the revolt? If he uses his powers of persuasion people will know who he is… besides he only gets out at night. Why is he trying to conceal his identity? Does he conceal it from his revolutionary partners?
What triggered his awakening?
When you say “take them down” you should be more specific: the oligarchy, the party, the president and his goons!? Who is the main antagonist? the police chief, the guy in charge?- 105 views
- 3 reviews
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Who’s the protagonist?
The goal and conflict is not clear.
Who are these people? What kind of show is this?
Fiction or reality TV?
How do they enter the psyche of the viewers?
What’s the genre?- 93 views
- 2 reviews
- -1 votes