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I guess my question is, how does the first part of your logline relate to the second?
How do we get from, being lured away by sexy aliens to saving the world from superrich aliens? What is the connection between the two sets of aliens?
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You have a strong hook but not a strong inciting incident.
You need a specific scene at the beginning of the story that establishes the problems in his marriage.
Then introduce the hook about the Wishing well.So nice hook, but you need to establish the problem in a more compelling way.
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I had to read this a couple of times… that’s not good.
However, if draconic direction means there is a dragon, I think the story itself sounds interesting. But if you mean dragon you should just say dragon (For clarity)
I am going to give this a logline attempt, I apologize in advance for adding one element that is not in your logline but I just thought it would be interesting.
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“When no one believes the recent cattle mutilations are caused by a mythical dragon, an alcoholic small-town sheriff must enlist the aid of a reclusive mythology expert, and the high school DnD club to kill the beast and save his town.”This review accepted by doc21g. 3 days ago Earned 50 points.
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What is the main conflict of the story?
What is standing in the way of the lead character?- 50 views
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