This is just the inciting incident, you are missing a goal for the lead character and what’s standing in his way for this to be a story.

Two things. What is the revenge for, and how does invading the dream achieve that goal? 

Adding those two things will make the logline more interesting?

The Hitman’s Bodyguard (2017)

(Wasn’t sure if I should add to the logline that the hitman is a witness, adding it made the logline kind of clunky but it is somewhat important storywise)

The term, “25-year-old young woman” is a bit clunky. (If you tell us she is 25 you don’t need to further tell us she is young)

Also “Moonlights herself” is also a little weird. Because…

First: you can just say “Moonlights as a dancer”

Second: We don’t know what the lead character’s day job is, it doesn’t matter if she is moonlighting, unless there is a conflict between the day job and the dance gig.

What sets the lead character down her path?

For instance: Does she meet ‘the perfect man’ only to realize she’ll never be able to truly fall in love until she faces her past?

Also, is this just about a woman in therapy? Or does she confront her father about the terrible things he did in an effort to get closure?

In other words, how does she figure out the pieces?

Because how she gets closure is what the story will be about.

What is the main story, The talk between the old associate and the main character, or is it the events of the past, told using their conversation as a tool to transport the reader into the past and watch as that story takes place?

“When she saves a boy with destructive powers, an elementary student must use her own powers in order to…” (Then tell us what she must do)

I have to agree, some specifics would be helpful to flesh this logline out.

First: How is the lead bullied? Is he given a wedgie? Beaten up? Did he have his clothes stolen while taking a shower at gym class? What is the specific event that sets off the lead character?

Second: And the term, revenge is vague as well. Does he put laxatives in the school lunch? Does he hack the school computer and give them all F’s, Does he burn down the school?

In other words, depending on the type of revenge, (Funny, mean, poetic justice etc.)  this could be “Revenge of the Nerds” or it could be “The Basketball Diaries” And that is a pretty big swing of styles.

Think of Lord of the rings.

“When an evil sorcerer threatens to enslave the entire world, a humble Hobbit decides to go on a trip.”

Now if I hadn’t read the books but was just reading the logline, I would be scratching my head in confusion. How does going on a trip stop an evil sorcerer?

The reason it’s confusing is that it’s missing why going on the trip is important,  (to destroy the ring which happens to be the power base for the evil sorcerer)

In your logline, his son gets kidnapped, so the lead steals some cars… obviously, something is missing from the logline, How does this all connect.

I have to agree with Mike, the lead character’s son is kidnapped and he decides to steal some cars.

If this is the plot, you will have to show us how those two things connect.