1. Posted: April 7, 2022In:

    A woman finds a phone connected to the future, she is tasked by people to do a series of increasingly extreme tasks in an attempt to fix their present, or it may be her latest bout of mental illness.

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    The premise is very interesting. Suggesting her incentive - why should she helps them - will make it more believable, when she continues to attempt the increasingly extreme tasks.

    The premise is very interesting. Suggesting her incentive – why should she helps them – will make it more believable, when she continues to attempt the increasingly extreme tasks.

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  2. Posted: May 1, 2022In:

    Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

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    I love the outline. I like the section where he realizes he has become part of the problem; this will help explore the theme. What he does for a living, might have this movie inadvertently be compared to the taxi driver (1976). Maybe finding a different way of executing the second act will help, whaRead more

    I love the outline. I like the section where he realizes he has become part of the problem; this will help explore the theme. What he does for a living, might have this movie inadvertently be compared to the taxi driver (1976). Maybe finding a different way of executing the second act will help, what do you think?

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  3. Posted: May 1, 2022In:

    Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

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    After reading the text under the logline I could make complete sense. So that needs to change. Otherwise I really like the idea/ where it’s going.

    After reading the text under the logline I could make complete sense. So that needs to change.
    Otherwise I really like the idea/ where it’s going.

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