1. Posted: January 5, 2016In:

    A animal activist discovers human experiments not animal during a raid. She must survive murderous security to rescue a test subject and tell the world the truth.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Thanks FFF. loglines are my weakest skill. I'll give it go and repost soon. ?But you have outlined the story in a nutshell. ?The human can be anyone. ?Different people bring different things. Another female, she could see how it could be her, just some bad choices. Or a guy (my less favourite) but cRead more

    Thanks FFF.

    loglines are my weakest skill. I’ll give it go and repost soon. ?But you have outlined the story in a nutshell. ?The human can be anyone. ?Different people bring different things.

    Another female, she could see how it could be her, just some bad choices. Or a guy (my less favourite) but could have some romantic elements. ?Or as you say the kid, which will bring out more fear in the audience as a kid always seems defenceless.

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  2. Posted: January 5, 2016In:

    A animal activist discovers human experiments not animal during a raid. She must survive murderous security to rescue a test subject and tell the world the truth.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Dpg that is a great point I could use as the lowest point in the story. i think of the as a contained version of Duel, an inciting incident that kicks off a massive series of action events. ?I haven't even considered character traits or flaws yet. ?It is a pure action concept. Nir you are moving itRead more

    Dpg that is a great point I could use as the lowest point in the story.

    i think of the as a contained version of Duel, an inciting incident that kicks off a massive series of action events. ?I haven’t even considered character traits or flaws yet. ?It is a pure action concept.

    Nir you are moving it towards drama, which my normal favourite, but this is my Die Hard. ?She may even take out the main bad guy. ?There could be the opportunity for her to think she’ll give them a chance to change for the greater good, then be doubled crossed. ?This is just a helicopter view of a concept.

    thanks for the help folks.

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  3. Posted: January 3, 2016In:

    When a world famous actor moves in next door, a small town girl tries to teach him how to have a normal life

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    The two things I think need a look. ?I am guessing he has moved to a small town? Because it could be a major city with a girl from a small town living next door. ?If he has moved to a small town then why? ?This could give you so much implied story beyond just an inciting incident, "post rehab", "visRead more

    The two things I think need a look. ?I am guessing he has moved to a small town? Because it could be a major city with a girl from a small town living next door. ?If he has moved to a small town then why? ?This could give you so much implied story beyond just an inciting incident, “post rehab”, “visiting a dying relative” etc.

    What is their eventual relationship? I think this would set tone. Here is my take on Titanic as an example.

    A young socialite desperate to escape her controlling fiance fails in love with a penniless artist on board Titanic.

    i hope this helps. ?I can see this as a good story.

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