Who is the protagonist here? The character who has made it? Or the one who has failed? And what is so important about re-establishing contact? What are the stakes? That is, what does the protagonist stand to lose if he fails? What does he stand to gain if he succeeds?
It's an interesting premise, but I suggest it may need some refinement. >>>learn how to box How is she going to learn? She's going to need a teacher, right? And given the nature of coach-athlete relationship, doesn't that mean the coach character will get a significant amount of screen timeRead more
The premise has promise, but it's not clear what the plot is, what the story is really about. And at 42 words in length it's a bit long. (It's better if a logline comes does not exceed 40 words, better yet if it does not exceed 25 words.) So, alas, this version of the plot conveys too little necessaRead more
When a now famous singer returns to his hometown after years, an old estranged friend and former band mate, now unsuccessful has to re-create an old gig of their band to get in contact with his friend again.
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Who is the protagonist here? The character who has made it? Or the one who has failed? And what is so important about re-establishing contact? What are the stakes? That is, what does the protagonist stand to lose if he fails? What does he stand to gain if he succeeds?
A young woman, whose boxing brother has been violent towards her all her life, decides to finally overcome her inner fear and learn how to box so that she can defeat him once and for all.
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It's an interesting premise, but I suggest it may need some refinement. >>>learn how to box How is she going to learn? She's going to need a teacher, right? And given the nature of coach-athlete relationship, doesn't that mean the coach character will get a significant amount of screen timeRead more
When a young woman takes up a run-away eleven-year old under her wing, she must go to extremes that risk her chance at the medical career of her dreams to help the child through the consequences of the gory past she fled.
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The premise has promise, but it's not clear what the plot is, what the story is really about. And at 42 words in length it's a bit long. (It's better if a logline comes does not exceed 40 words, better yet if it does not exceed 25 words.) So, alas, this version of the plot conveys too little necessaRead more