The only movie that comes to my mind when I hear about a protagonist who MUST kill someone against their will is "The Killing of a Chinese Bookie" by John Cassavetes, where the killing was to balance a huge gambling dept to the mafia. What are the stakes in your story? She must kill a fellow studentRead more
The only movie that comes to my mind when I hear about a protagonist who MUST kill someone against their will is “The Killing of a Chinese Bookie” by John Cassavetes, where the killing was to balance a huge gambling dept to the mafia.
What are the stakes in your story? She must kill a fellow student or what? What’s stopping her from reporting the sorority as a crime organisation? Her autism? Is this realistic?
CHARACTER: "A cold-hearted journalist..." Okay, that's definitely a flaw and a possible start for a transformation arc. EVENT: You don't have one. No inciting incident. We know she is shooting a documentary about an e-sport player (whatever that is... What is that? If I don't know what it is, thereRead more
CHARACTER: “A cold-hearted journalist…” Okay, that’s definitely a flaw and a possible start for a transformation arc.
EVENT: You don’t have one. No inciting incident. We know she is shooting a documentary about an e-sport player (whatever that is… What is that? If I don’t know what it is, there must be more people who don’t know what it is.)
ACTION: You don’t have one. “She discovers the hardness of being born unlucky” is not an action. What does she want and how can she get it? That’s what drives a story.
An immortal alien race must come out of hiding on earth and reunite, when an ancient enemy threatens humanity.
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I see this is posted under the "Examples" category. Is it an existing movie, then? Which one?
I see this is posted under the “Examples” category. Is it an existing movie, then? Which one?
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The only movie that comes to my mind when I hear about a protagonist who MUST kill someone against their will is "The Killing of a Chinese Bookie" by John Cassavetes, where the killing was to balance a huge gambling dept to the mafia. What are the stakes in your story? She must kill a fellow studentRead more
The only movie that comes to my mind when I hear about a protagonist who MUST kill someone against their will is “The Killing of a Chinese Bookie” by John Cassavetes, where the killing was to balance a huge gambling dept to the mafia.
What are the stakes in your story? She must kill a fellow student or what? What’s stopping her from reporting the sorority as a crime organisation? Her autism? Is this realistic?
See lessA cold-hearted journalist records a documentary about a very talented e-sport player until she discovers the hardness of being born unlucky.
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CHARACTER: "A cold-hearted journalist..." Okay, that's definitely a flaw and a possible start for a transformation arc. EVENT: You don't have one. No inciting incident. We know she is shooting a documentary about an e-sport player (whatever that is... What is that? If I don't know what it is, thereRead more
CHARACTER: “A cold-hearted journalist…” Okay, that’s definitely a flaw and a possible start for a transformation arc.
EVENT: You don’t have one. No inciting incident. We know she is shooting a documentary about an e-sport player (whatever that is… What is that? If I don’t know what it is, there must be more people who don’t know what it is.)
ACTION: You don’t have one. “She discovers the hardness of being born unlucky” is not an action. What does she want and how can she get it? That’s what drives a story.
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