Consider the following to strengthen your logline: 1. Why were they in this build? E.g., Urban explorers shooting their latest abandoned vid. 2. What’s the psychology of your protag? E.g., Claustrophobic, afraid of the dark, reckless? 3. Who is this old man? A “get off of my lawn” derelict? 4. WhatRead more
Consider the following to strengthen your logline: 1. Why were they in this build? E.g., Urban explorers shooting their latest abandoned vid. 2. What’s the psychology of your protag? E.g., Claustrophobic, afraid of the dark, reckless? 3. Who is this old man? A “get off of my lawn” derelict? 4. What does “forces her to face her greatest fear” look like?
Fascinating premise. In this version, you can use the “OMG the journal is blank/gone” as an ACT II plot twist. Leaning towards: “An uninventive child author sourcing stories from a mystical self-writing dream journal sets out to clear his name when his debut novel is accused of plagiarism.” Make thiRead more
Fascinating premise. In this version, you can use the “OMG the journal is blank/gone” as an ACT II plot twist. Leaning towards: “An uninventive child author sourcing stories from a mystical self-writing dream journal sets out to clear his name when his debut novel is accused of plagiarism.”
A better version, thinking out loud – what about: 1. Switching "Tales" with "Alter egos ..." 2. Playing on alter egos, instead of “discover” what about uncover? To uncover is to reveal. 3. Switching “imprison” with lock-up – this word is more associated with emotions e.g., the negative emotion thatRead more
A better version, thinking out loud – what about: 1. Switching “Tales” with “Alter egos …” 2. Playing on alter egos, instead of “discover” what about uncover? To uncover is to reveal. 3. Switching “imprison” with lock-up – this word is more associated with emotions e.g., the negative emotion that created the “killer” alter ego.
“Alter egos intertwine as a schizophrenic detective puts together puzzle-pieces in a quest to uncover and lock up a serial killer posing as Hollywood’s Messiah”.
After losing her best friend in an abandoned building, a girl will have to find a way out before an old man forces her to face her greatest fear.
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Consider the following to strengthen your logline: 1. Why were they in this build? E.g., Urban explorers shooting their latest abandoned vid. 2. What’s the psychology of your protag? E.g., Claustrophobic, afraid of the dark, reckless? 3. Who is this old man? A “get off of my lawn” derelict? 4. WhatRead more
Consider the following to strengthen your logline:
1. Why were they in this build? E.g., Urban explorers shooting their latest abandoned vid.
2. What’s the psychology of your protag? E.g., Claustrophobic, afraid of the dark, reckless?
3. Who is this old man? A “get off of my lawn” derelict?
4. What does “forces her to face her greatest fear” look like?
Take care.
See lessAn uninventive children’s author, whose supposed dreams have long been documented in his bedside journal by a mysterious ghostwriter, wakes up to a shockingly blank journal upon the release of his debut novel.
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Fascinating premise. In this version, you can use the “OMG the journal is blank/gone” as an ACT II plot twist. Leaning towards: “An uninventive child author sourcing stories from a mystical self-writing dream journal sets out to clear his name when his debut novel is accused of plagiarism.” Make thiRead more
Fascinating premise. In this version, you can use the “OMG the journal is blank/gone” as an ACT II plot twist.
Leaning towards:
“An uninventive child author sourcing stories from a mystical self-writing dream journal sets out to clear his name when his debut novel is accused of plagiarism.”
Make this yours, take care
See lessThree characters, three life stories, integrate as a schizophrenic detective puts together puzzle-pieces in a quest to imprison a split-serial killer posing as Hollywood’s Messiah. — WHOLE
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A better version, thinking out loud – what about: 1. Switching "Tales" with "Alter egos ..." 2. Playing on alter egos, instead of “discover” what about uncover? To uncover is to reveal. 3. Switching “imprison” with lock-up – this word is more associated with emotions e.g., the negative emotion thatRead more
A better version, thinking out loud – what about:
1. Switching “Tales” with “Alter egos …”
2. Playing on alter egos, instead of “discover” what about uncover? To uncover is to reveal.
3. Switching “imprison” with lock-up – this word is more associated with emotions e.g., the negative emotion that created the “killer” alter ego.
“Alter egos intertwine as a schizophrenic detective puts together puzzle-pieces in a quest to uncover and lock up a serial killer posing as Hollywood’s Messiah”.
BTW: You owe Richiev and me a beer 😉
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