Interesting premise, consider the following: 1. I struggle with your major event - the fifth Buddha’s return / following these three youngsters. 2. Your world is great, but who is your baddie? 3. Concerning the three youngsters, is the fifth Buddha reborn through one of them? Example: “In a collapsiRead more
Interesting premise, consider the following: 1. I struggle with your major event – the fifth Buddha’s return / following these three youngsters. 2. Your world is great, but who is your baddie? 3. Concerning the three youngsters, is the fifth Buddha reborn through one of them?
Example: “In a collapsing global police state, a reincarnate fifth Buddha sets out to restore nirvana to the world”
I only have a basic understanding of Buddhism – maybe use my thoughts/questions as a good example of your typical reader.
Consider the following: Why him and not the authorities to the rescue? Who is this girl to your protag? What is this hostile org and what is their agenda? Example: “A young railfan embarks on a cross-country rescue mission when his runaway girl is taken by a polygamist cult to marry their big love lRead more
Consider the following: Why him and not the authorities to the rescue? Who is this girl to your protag? What is this hostile org and what is their agenda?
Example: “A young railfan embarks on a cross-country rescue mission when his runaway girl is taken by a polygamist cult to marry their big love leader”
Leaning towards: “An uptight director's cash-strapped retirement home is turned topsy-turvy when accepting a bailout from her estranged father and his ensuing meddling sparks an old-folks revolt” Make this yours, take care.
Leaning towards: “An uptight director’s cash-strapped retirement home is turned topsy-turvy when accepting a bailout from her estranged father and his ensuing meddling sparks an old-folks revolt”
Fear of monetary demise turns the globe into a top-security prison; Buddha senses implosion; looms with a pragmatic paragon to unzip recession and stress from deceptive human life; enlightens three lost children who endure from NASA plane crash in Vedic woods.
Odie
Interesting premise, consider the following: 1. I struggle with your major event - the fifth Buddha’s return / following these three youngsters. 2. Your world is great, but who is your baddie? 3. Concerning the three youngsters, is the fifth Buddha reborn through one of them? Example: “In a collapsiRead more
Interesting premise, consider the following:
1. I struggle with your major event – the fifth Buddha’s return / following these three youngsters.
2. Your world is great, but who is your baddie?
3. Concerning the three youngsters, is the fifth Buddha reborn through one of them?
Example:
“In a collapsing global police state, a reincarnate fifth Buddha sets out to restore nirvana to the world”
I only have a basic understanding of Buddhism – maybe use my thoughts/questions as a good example of your typical reader.
Keep going, take care.
See lessA young, promising rail enthusiast embarks across the country to rescue a girl held hostage by a hostile organization.
Odie
Consider the following: Why him and not the authorities to the rescue? Who is this girl to your protag? What is this hostile org and what is their agenda? Example: “A young railfan embarks on a cross-country rescue mission when his runaway girl is taken by a polygamist cult to marry their big love lRead more
Consider the following:
Why him and not the authorities to the rescue?
Who is this girl to your protag?
What is this hostile org and what is their agenda?
Example:
“A young railfan embarks on a cross-country rescue mission when his runaway girl is taken by a polygamist cult to marry their big love leader”
Hope you find this constructive, take care.
See lessTo save a retirement home from bankruptcy, its uptight director must convince her estranged, obnoxious father to make a significant donation, or face losing her job and custody of her daughter. But when he insists on playing a role in running the home, the director must balance the need to keep her father’s money with the increasing annoyance of the home’s residents with the coarse intruder.
Odie
Leaning towards: “An uptight director's cash-strapped retirement home is turned topsy-turvy when accepting a bailout from her estranged father and his ensuing meddling sparks an old-folks revolt” Make this yours, take care.
Leaning towards:
“An uptight director’s cash-strapped retirement home is turned topsy-turvy when accepting a bailout from her estranged father and his ensuing meddling sparks an old-folks revolt”
Make this yours, take care.
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