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I think you should try to add stakes to the struggle the protagonist takes on. In its current state, it feels as if the protagonist is reacting to the situation she finds herself in by reliving this trauma. If you can show how the stakes involved effects her struggle, you'll have a stronger concept.
There doesn't seem to be anything for these characters to gain other than each other. If that is true, the movie wouldn't have any legs to stand on. If you add some kind of struggle or force or goal that would make one character actively pursue the other, then you've created something for the audienRead more
I like the overall idea, even without a clear protagonist the logline seems to hold its own. I think that if you're gonna go down the route of each detective taking on a different serial killer, the could be a clearer struggle. You allude to the losing hope in the logline, that seems to be the stakeRead more