1. Posted: June 26, 2022In:

    When home is infested with cockroaches, a paranoid recluse must overcome his need for control in order to destroy his home to kill the infestation.

    LachieM Penpusher

    I feel like his goal to kill the cockroaches and what he must overcome don't really go hand in hand. If he were to overcome his need for control, won't the protagonist be alright with seeing the occasional cockroach? I can definitely see a great short story idea here! but maybe tighten down what theRead more

    I feel like his goal to kill the cockroaches and what he must overcome don’t really go hand in hand. If he were to overcome his need for control, won’t the protagonist be alright with seeing the occasional cockroach?

    I can definitely see a great short story idea here! but maybe tighten down what the true goal or need for your character is.

    Good luck!

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  2. Posted: June 22, 2022In:

    When a car swerves into a telephone pole, a young girl rushes to help the injured driver; but when the driver takes her hostage as police arrive, she must find a way to escape her captor.

    LachieM Penpusher

    God Bless Sam 🙏

    God Bless Sam 🙏

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  3. Posted: June 22, 2022In:

    When her criminal partner is murdered by her boss, a two-bit thief must infiltrate the ranks of his operation and take her revenge.

    LachieM Penpusher

    Hey Sam! I'm sure you've got a clear idea of what this story will be, but the logline is a little vague. What line of business are they in? Who actually is the protagonist/how would you describe her? Why MUST she take revenge and not go to the authorities? It sounds like a very promising idea that IRead more

    Hey Sam!

    I’m sure you’ve got a clear idea of what this story will be, but the logline is a little vague. What line of business are they in? Who actually is the protagonist/how would you describe her? Why MUST she take revenge and not go to the authorities?

    It sounds like a very promising idea that I’m sure you’ll polish up very nicely!

    – Lachie

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