The protagonist should never be forced to go on his quest. He MUST go willingly into the second act. I feel like I'm missing some information. Who is the crown fighting? Surely everyone is questing after this? We need to understand why it's so important the travellers get there first. What happens iRead more
A logline isn't about mystery, it's about providing a concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or end of Act II using (ideally) no more than 40 words phrased as a single sentence. Hide the mystery and, as is frequently the case, it simply doesn't make sense. Or you bury the hook. EitheRead more
What's Poseidon got to do with it? How is a completely normal FBI agent with no superpowers supposed to stand his own against a superpowered serial killer? How does him duping his way into a single mother's life get any attention from the FBI? If they're watching him this closely, they'd have arrestRead more
A cynical sellsword joins forces with a mysterious traveler to conceal a wish-granting treasure when he learns that the King who hired him to find it will use it to become an all-powerful tyrant.
Mike Pedley
The protagonist should never be forced to go on his quest. He MUST go willingly into the second act. I feel like I'm missing some information. Who is the crown fighting? Surely everyone is questing after this? We need to understand why it's so important the travellers get there first. What happens iRead more
A demonically supercharged serial killer dupes his way into a single mother’s life which rouses a talented FBI agent from retirement and awakens Poseidon.
Mike Pedley
A logline isn't about mystery, it's about providing a concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or end of Act II using (ideally) no more than 40 words phrased as a single sentence. Hide the mystery and, as is frequently the case, it simply doesn't make sense. Or you bury the hook. EitheRead more
A demonically supercharged serial killer dupes his way into a single mother’s life which rouses a talented FBI agent from retirement and awakens Poseidon.
Mike Pedley
What's Poseidon got to do with it? How is a completely normal FBI agent with no superpowers supposed to stand his own against a superpowered serial killer? How does him duping his way into a single mother's life get any attention from the FBI? If they're watching him this closely, they'd have arrestRead more