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When his son is kidnapped, an overprotective father must go on a long and tough journey to find his son.
This works - character, event and action are all in place! However, it would be nice to get something about why this journey is meaningful for the father - "must face his fears" or something along those lines. Also, the repetition of the word 'son' makes the read a tiny bit clunkier - try changing iRead more
This works – character, event and action are all in place! However, it would be nice to get something about why this journey is meaningful for the father – “must face his fears” or something along those lines. Also, the repetition of the word ‘son’ makes the read a tiny bit clunkier – try changing it to ‘him’ or ‘child’ the second time.
See lessWhen he reincarnates as himself in Stockholm 2021, August Strindberg realizes he has to learn screenwriting at Story on Gotland to make a living -and there, falling in love with his classmate Siri – a happily married liberated feminist that mocks him for his fossil values and ideas, must revaluate himself and his view upon the world.
Denna vill vi se!
Denna vill vi se!
See lessWhen things starts to repeat itself and people begin to appear in unexpected places a older man tries to understand what is going on.
This is a great start! I would like to see a clearer event, character and action though. What starts repeating itself? How is that related to the man? Who is this man, apart form being old - give him an adjective that is more descriptive of his character. What does he have to do? Understanding what'Read more
This is a great start! I would like to see a clearer event, character and action though.
What starts repeating itself? How is that related to the man?
Who is this man, apart form being old – give him an adjective that is more descriptive of his character.
What does he have to do? Understanding what’s going on seems to be the first step, but what he does with that information is the exciting part. Let that be the action of the logline.
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