Hi, I like we’re you’re heading with the story. I get it’s a fantasy, and a kingdom that needs saved. However, there are some parts that are missing and hard to understand. After reading your summary it was a little clearer. This site has a Logline formula I recommend using or this helps me as well.Read more
Hi, I like we’re you’re heading with the story. I get it’s a fantasy, and a kingdom that needs saved. However, there are some parts that are missing and hard to understand. After reading your summary it was a little clearer. This site has a Logline formula I recommend using or this helps me as well. Protagonist + inciting incident + central conflict + protagonist goal. Does not have to be in that exact order, but it ensures you get those main elements in the logline. Here is my example When a evil dragon threatens a kingdom, a skittish prince must defeat it before it gains ultimate power and destroy’s everything in its path. You want to simplify it and get to the point. Don’t use specific names. The rules or the backstory is not known so it has to understandable for everyone. See what works for you then go from there. I hope this helps. Keep up the hard work.
James son of the king of the Tree-GLow Kingdom, is called to save the kingdom of a dragon. He has to defend it for his family and the kingdom fighting with the wisdom of the Esential Gems.
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Hi, I like we’re you’re heading with the story. I get it’s a fantasy, and a kingdom that needs saved. However, there are some parts that are missing and hard to understand. After reading your summary it was a little clearer. This site has a Logline formula I recommend using or this helps me as well.Read more
Hi,
See lessI like we’re you’re heading with the story. I get it’s a fantasy, and a kingdom that needs saved. However, there are some parts that are missing and hard to understand. After reading your summary it was a little clearer. This site has a Logline formula I recommend using or this helps me as well.
Protagonist + inciting incident + central conflict + protagonist goal.
Does not have to be in that exact order, but it ensures you get those main elements in the logline.
Here is my example
When a evil dragon threatens a kingdom, a skittish prince must defeat it before it gains ultimate power and destroy’s everything in its path.
You want to simplify it and get to the point. Don’t use specific names. The rules or the backstory is not known so it has to understandable for everyone. See what works for you then go from there. I hope this helps. Keep up the hard work.