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When a school child is killed in a botched kidnapping case, a young superhero decides to retire, but her long-lost nemesis reappears–an evil superhero who also happens to be her brother.
What is the forward story? Half the logline is backstory. What does her Nemesis (Brother) want? What are the stakes? What must the lead do to stop him? Example: "When her evil brother attempts to crash the moon into the earth, a disgraced retired superhero must rally all the meta-humans in order toRead more
What is the forward story? Half the logline is backstory.
What does her Nemesis (Brother) want?
What are the stakes?
What must the lead do to stop him?
Example: “When her evil brother attempts to crash the moon into the earth, a disgraced retired superhero must rally all the meta-humans in order to defeat his dastardly world-destroying plans.”
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This sounds interesting... Not sure how there can be a written word from a fictitious figure though. You might want to add a word or two of explanation. (Also, why is it a fictitious father figure, why not the journal from his real father who is dead? That sounds like it might be more poignant. HowRead more
This sounds interesting…
Not sure how there can be a written word from a fictitious figure though. You might want to add a word or two of explanation.
(Also, why is it a fictitious father figure, why not the journal from his real father who is dead? That sounds like it might be more poignant. How are we supposed to have feelings for a character (The father figure) who is fictitious)
However, that being said, I do like the premise. I think there is a there, here.
See lessStripped of his license a disgraced ER doctor running from his past reinvents himself in Japan only to be lured deep into a community with a violent secret where he must solve an unspeakable crime.
"Stripped of his license, a disgraced ER doctor reinvents himself in (Morrocco) where he is drawn deep into the criminal underworld." (With seemingly no way out) ------------------------------------------------------------ 1: I would be specific with the country, I just put Morrocco but it could beRead more
“Stripped of his license, a disgraced ER doctor reinvents himself in (Morrocco) where he is drawn deep into the criminal underworld.” (With seemingly no way out)
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1: I would be specific with the country, I just put Morrocco but it could be any country, Brazil, South Africa, Vietnam because specific is better than vague.
2: “Shocking consequences” doesn’t really tell us anything, I would leave it out or name the specific event, however, the event sounds like a plot twist, not an inciting incident so I just dropped it in my example.
Hope this helped
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