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Stripped of his license a disgraced ER doctor running from his past reinvents himself in Japan only to be lured deep into a community with a violent secret where he must solve an unspeakable crime.
"Stripped of his license, a disgraced ER doctor reinvents himself in (Morrocco) where he is drawn deep into the criminal underworld." (With seemingly no way out) ------------------------------------------------------------ 1: I would be specific with the country, I just put Morrocco but it could beRead more
“Stripped of his license, a disgraced ER doctor reinvents himself in (Morrocco) where he is drawn deep into the criminal underworld.” (With seemingly no way out)
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1: I would be specific with the country, I just put Morrocco but it could be any country, Brazil, South Africa, Vietnam because specific is better than vague.
2: “Shocking consequences” doesn’t really tell us anything, I would leave it out or name the specific event, however, the event sounds like a plot twist, not an inciting incident so I just dropped it in my example.
Hope this helped
See lessAfter accidentally leaving an engagement ring inside the commuter train, a handsome young man must catch the train before it reaches San Jose.
I am assuming there is an 'or else' Is it lose the ring or lose the girl ------------------- "After leaving a family heirloom wedding ring on a commuter train, a desperate groom must catch the train before it reaches San Jose or lose the wedding band forever."
I am assuming there is an ‘or else’
Is it lose the ring
or lose the girl
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“After leaving a family heirloom wedding ring on a commuter train, a desperate groom must catch the train before it reaches San Jose or lose the wedding band forever.”
See lessAfter a mother mysteriously dies, her two children are forced to go back to their hometown that she fled from. Soon dark, horrendous and other wordly family secrets resurface threatening to consume whats left of the family.
You shouldn't give away the ending or a 'big reveal' in a logline. A: If something important happens in the first ten minutes of the story, add it to the logline. B: If something important happens in the last ten minutes of the story, don't add it to the logline Or to put it this way: A: If what 'foRead more
You shouldn’t give away the ending or a ‘big reveal’ in a logline.
A: If something important happens in the first ten minutes of the story, add it to the logline.
B: If something important happens in the last ten minutes of the story, don’t add it to the logline
Or to put it this way:
A: If what ‘forced’ your lead character to return home sets the story in motion, then add it.
B: If what ‘forced’ you lead characters to return home is a ‘big reveal’ not told to the audience till the end of the story, then don’t add ‘being forced’ to the logline, just say they returned home after their mother’s death
Hope that helped.
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