Thanks Nir and Craig,Her job is a Youtuber dishing out relationship advice with her boyfriend.Boyfriend dumps her so she needs a new boyfriend to produce the show.The shy pro gamer she falls for is not prime time material. Show suffers, big $$$ deal threatens to unravel, manager freaking out, tryingRead more
Thanks Nir and Craig,
Her job is a Youtuber dishing out relationship advice with her boyfriend.
Boyfriend dumps her so she needs a new boyfriend to produce the show.
The shy pro gamer she falls for is not prime time material.
Show suffers, big $$$ deal threatens to unravel, manager freaking out, trying to pull them apart and pair her with a very presentable Prince Charming (who does a lot of PDA but is a narcissist A hole).
OK I did some revisions.? Any feedback is much appreciated.Movie Title is "P.D.A.?Public Displays of Affection"Loglines are as follows:?1 - 4? don't follow the: when+hero+must formula. But they express the story concept quite well.1 What if the love of your life couldn't show their affection for youRead more
OK I did some revisions.? Any feedback is much appreciated.
Movie Title is “P.D.A.?Public Displays of Affection”
Loglines are as follows:?1 – 4? don’t follow the: when+hero+must formula. But they express the story concept quite well.
1 What if the love of your life couldn’t show their affection for you ?
2 What if the love of your life couldn’t show their affection for you in public?
3 What if the?person you’ve fallen in love with ?couldn’t show their affection for you?
4 What if the?person you’ve fallen in love with ?couldn’t show their affection for you in public?
Five and six ?are more formulaic loglines:
5 A budding romance between two rival social media stars is threatened by a heartless talent manger.
6 An?unlikely romance between?a laid back pro gamer and a perfectionist Youtube girl?sends ?her?page?views plummeting.?Her heartless manger schemes to break them apart.
Which one (if any!) make you want to read the synopsis?
Also I was thinking of using one from the first group and one from the second group in one logline. 1+5 for example.
Hi Nir,Thanks for your feedback. If it's hard to understand then I have not done my job creating the logline.Hang loose is intended to be the opposite of perfectionist, hence the irony and an interesting part of the two main characters' love story.PDA = Public display of affection. I thought that teRead more
Hi Nir,
Thanks for your feedback. If it’s hard to understand then I have not done my job creating the logline.
Hang loose is intended to be the opposite of perfectionist, hence the irony and an interesting part of the two main characters’ love story.
PDA = Public display of affection. I thought that terms was common enough to be understood in the logline. It’s American English. ?I’ll have to reconsider.
Ctrl+alt+delete is just a cheeky was of saying “derail” or “thwart”. ?I intended it to sound technical since the movie is about social media and dating in modern times.
A perfectionist Youtube star’s page views plummet when she falls for a hang loose gamer geek. Their PDA insecurities and her scheming manager threaten to ctrl+alt+delete their dreams to go public with their “In a relationship” status.
SSalvatore
Thanks Nir and Craig,Her job is a Youtuber dishing out relationship advice with her boyfriend.Boyfriend dumps her so she needs a new boyfriend to produce the show.The shy pro gamer she falls for is not prime time material. Show suffers, big $$$ deal threatens to unravel, manager freaking out, tryingRead more
Thanks Nir and Craig,
Her job is a Youtuber dishing out relationship advice with her boyfriend.
Boyfriend dumps her so she needs a new boyfriend to produce the show.
The shy pro gamer she falls for is not prime time material.
Show suffers, big $$$ deal threatens to unravel, manager freaking out, trying to pull them apart and pair her with a very presentable Prince Charming (who does a lot of PDA but is a narcissist A hole).
S
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SSalvatore
OK I did some revisions.? Any feedback is much appreciated.Movie Title is "P.D.A.?Public Displays of Affection"Loglines are as follows:?1 - 4? don't follow the: when+hero+must formula. But they express the story concept quite well.1 What if the love of your life couldn't show their affection for youRead more
OK I did some revisions.? Any feedback is much appreciated.
Movie Title is “P.D.A.?Public Displays of Affection”
Loglines are as follows:?1 – 4? don’t follow the: when+hero+must formula. But they express the story concept quite well.
1 What if the love of your life couldn’t show their affection for you ?
2 What if the love of your life couldn’t show their affection for you in public?
3 What if the?person you’ve fallen in love with ?couldn’t show their affection for you?
4 What if the?person you’ve fallen in love with ?couldn’t show their affection for you in public?
Five and six ?are more formulaic loglines:
5 A budding romance between two rival social media stars is threatened by a heartless talent manger.
6 An?unlikely romance between?a laid back pro gamer and a perfectionist Youtube girl?sends ?her?page?views plummeting.?Her heartless manger schemes to break them apart.
Which one (if any!) make you want to read the synopsis?
Also I was thinking of using one from the first group and one from the second group in one logline. 1+5 for example.
See lessA perfectionist Youtube star’s page views plummet when she falls for a hang loose gamer geek. Their PDA insecurities and her scheming manager threaten to ctrl+alt+delete their dreams to go public with their “In a relationship” status.
SSalvatore
Hi Nir,Thanks for your feedback. If it's hard to understand then I have not done my job creating the logline.Hang loose is intended to be the opposite of perfectionist, hence the irony and an interesting part of the two main characters' love story.PDA = Public display of affection. I thought that teRead more
Hi Nir,
Thanks for your feedback. If it’s hard to understand then I have not done my job creating the logline.
Hang loose is intended to be the opposite of perfectionist, hence the irony and an interesting part of the two main characters’ love story.
PDA = Public display of affection. I thought that terms was common enough to be understood in the logline. It’s American English. ?I’ll have to reconsider.
Ctrl+alt+delete is just a cheeky was of saying “derail” or “thwart”. ?I intended it to sound technical since the movie is about social media and dating in modern times.
?
S
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