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After they spend a night together falling in love, a couple part ways because of WWII, and years later, the man, presumed dead, turns up at her hometown to win her back – only to discover she is married.
When it comes to Romance stories, this is one of my favorite plots. Unfortunately, that is the main problem with your logline. Since this is a well know plot, you have to tell us what sets your story apart from all other stories based upon the same idea. The more specific the details, the better.
When it comes to Romance stories, this is one of my favorite plots.
Unfortunately, that is the main problem with your logline. Since this is a well know plot, you have to tell us what sets your story apart from all other stories based upon the same idea. The more specific the details, the better.
See lessAn abused teen is suspected of murdering his bully and has 48 hours to prove his innocence before the police find out he blackmailed the bully.
As Nir says, the time frame is too arbitrary. It might take the police hours, days or weeks to trace online photos back to their source. There are too many factors at play. Furthermore, it is not clear whether the blackmailing crime helps or hurts the teenager. In the normal course of events, the peRead more
As Nir says, the time frame is too arbitrary. It might take the police hours, days or weeks to trace online photos back to their source. There are too many factors at play. Furthermore, it is not clear whether the blackmailing crime helps or hurts the teenager. In the normal course of events, the person being blackmailed would be the suspect in the blackmailer’s murder, not the other way around. After all, if you are successfully blackmailing someone, you would want them to continue paying up. Hence, if the teen were found to have been blackmailing the bully, it might make the police less likely to think he was the murderer.
See less‘Off The Grid’ After moving off the grid, bickering newlyweds accidentally kill the creepy neighbors kid and now must work together to escape the families vengeful wrath.
After their car crash kills the neighbors son, newlyweds fight for survival against the fathers lust for vengeance by befriending the red-headed step child.There are too many non-causal events and unclear relationships. How did "their" car crash kill the "neighbor's son"? Who is the "red-headed stepRead more
After their car crash kills the neighbors son, newlyweds fight for survival against the fathers lust for vengeance by befriending the red-headed step child.
There are too many non-causal events and unclear relationships. How did “their” car crash kill the “neighbor’s son”? Who is the “red-headed step son” and how will befriending him calm the “father’s lust for vengeance”?
More importantly though, why should we root for the newlyweds? Do they possess any redeeming qualities to make us prefer that they prevail over their neighbor? As it stands, the audience might prefer to see the grieving father extract his revenge (especially if he could not get the justice he sought from the the state).
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